Conversation Between Mario C Davis 1977 and Mistress
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It's the same with the first few Chapters just combined 2 & 3, and 4 & 5 is all.
And if you want to read them check Deviant art to read the whole story so far.
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I don't see them in the approval section...tell me, did you increase the length of your chapters? Might be why the mods deleted it/them.
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I've reworked my story and post it but I've not seen it yet.
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I have just finished cleaning up Little Boy-Girl the saga there's 10 chapters as of now and I'll post them soon XOXOXOs
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Character speech is usually identified by being between these; "". For example...
"That's okay, I have a spare change of clothes in the nurse's office." Nichole said.
I'd suggest reading some of the stories on this site, specifically those written by people who have their own section, and you'll be able to see what's expected of posters. I'm trying to get a rule list in regards to what's expected of stories approved, but have had little luck thus far.
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Explain where it needs fixing and I'll do my best to fix it
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You didn't fix the character speech problem.
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I have cleaned it up and will post it soon. And it was the first one I wrote. So I wrote it from a dream stand point. With Nicole telling the story.
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Hey Mario, there's a few issues with the article you just submitted; there's no way to determine character speech, it's not long enough, and it's really all over the place time wise. If you can get all that fixed up, I can approve it.
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I just checked, none of your submissions are awaiting approval. I'm sorry this is becoming so difficult >_< We can try again if you'd like.
