I've made a few changes. Thanks for the proof reading, it really helps flesh my story out much better. I wanted their to be tension between rukia and ichigo which will help the later when things become much more....Let's just say interesting ^^
In return I present to you this...
http://sta.sh/01ixy7lzrrnj
It's still unfinished but It's based on the first chapter if you remember the part.