Well, Stella made the wish for her parents to listen to her more, so they were slowly coming back together by communicating more. This just helps it further. As for proper, in that I don't necessarily like the "Character: Dialogue" model, and I hope that you remember to do quotations for dialogue, and have a general grasp of grammar. That's all.
As for future RPs, what else would you like to do? This list has everything I like to do:
http://diaperedanime.com/forum/showt...126/index.html